Thank you so much for sharing how this made you feel Mark. A lot of my ‘micropoetry’ is derived from longer poems. Often, the ‘micro’ version feels as if it is more powerful than the host, perhaps because I have to choose exactly the right elements of the original to use and still convey a feeling or a thought. This little poem was from one of my 2013 poems called “Restless Ghosts” which is on my site but to save you searching I have copied it here for you!
Restless Ghosts
I am without you for another day
The rain is cold and I tremble
As I envy its touch on you
Do you hear me whisper
On the breeze tonight?
My heart sings your name
But the melody is sad
For you are the only one I see
We are like two flames
Burning in the night
As fragile as a dream
Which rising winds
Bear far away
You are the ache in my heart
A voice inside of me
And the night
Empty of your presence
Is ever full
Of restless ghosts
Love this idea to share previous portions of longer poetry as micropoetry. This is a beautiful poem and all I can say is those last 6 lines are like an arrow through my heart, just brilliant, so succinct and real. For me it is about memories and the grief that ever lingers. It is what I experience every now and then. You can understand why if you have ever read my about page. Keep writing and sharing Annie! PS – your photos and images are wonderful too!
Well you will find other poems that are a bit like that from time to time on my blog – I do write about melancholy and loss quite a lot – but hopefully not in a way that is too painful or dark. The images help!
Oh my Annie, this is beautiful! It made my heart skip a best because you captured exactly the feelings I have lived. Thank you!
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Thank you so much for sharing how this made you feel Mark. A lot of my ‘micropoetry’ is derived from longer poems. Often, the ‘micro’ version feels as if it is more powerful than the host, perhaps because I have to choose exactly the right elements of the original to use and still convey a feeling or a thought. This little poem was from one of my 2013 poems called “Restless Ghosts” which is on my site but to save you searching I have copied it here for you!
Restless Ghosts
I am without you for another day
The rain is cold and I tremble
As I envy its touch on you
Do you hear me whisper
On the breeze tonight?
My heart sings your name
But the melody is sad
For you are the only one I see
We are like two flames
Burning in the night
As fragile as a dream
Which rising winds
Bear far away
You are the ache in my heart
A voice inside of me
And the night
Empty of your presence
Is ever full
Of restless ghosts
© Ann Bagnall and AnnieB222.com, 2013.
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Love this idea to share previous portions of longer poetry as micropoetry. This is a beautiful poem and all I can say is those last 6 lines are like an arrow through my heart, just brilliant, so succinct and real. For me it is about memories and the grief that ever lingers. It is what I experience every now and then. You can understand why if you have ever read my about page. Keep writing and sharing Annie! PS – your photos and images are wonderful too!
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Well you will find other poems that are a bit like that from time to time on my blog – I do write about melancholy and loss quite a lot – but hopefully not in a way that is too painful or dark. The images help!
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